Thanks to everyone who entered the Write On! Online February Challenge – Have a Heart! Here are the winners:

1st Place:
PJ Kaiser – “Waiting for Spring”

(Prize: A medium-length (or 21,000 word) one-reader iScript; the 1st Place Story is posted below)

2nd Place:
Dylan Kenin – “Heart”
(Prize: Writing the Romantic Comedy by Billy Mernit, compliments of The Writers Store)

3rd Place:
Kathryn Ray – “Car Wheels”
(Prize: Writing, Publishing, and Marketing – You Can Do It! by Karen Cioffi and Cherished Pulse: Unconventional Love Poetry by Magdalena Ball & Carolyn Howard-Johnson, courtesy of VBT-Writers on the Move)

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THE FEBRUARY CHALLENGE: HAVE A HEART!

1st Place Winner – PJ Kaiser – “Waiting for Spring”

The sound of his voice breaks the silence of the living room. “I’m sorry, Middy.”  She starts to turn her head away from the window but then turns back. She doesn’t want him to see her eyes – swollen and red from crying. She sits on the cushions in the bay window holding the sheer curtain back with one hand and gazing into the backyard littered with the detritus of autumn.

She hears him taking off his coat and walking across the living room. His disembodied voice hovers behind her. He says again, “I’m sorry, Middy. I don’t know what else to say.”

“There’s nothing more to say. You have broken my heart for the last time. Now, go. And never call me Middy again.”

“Look, Middy – er – Midge – I feel terrible for what I did. I didn’t mean for it to happen. It’s just one of those things.”

She keeps her eyes focused out the window. Tears begin their trek down her cheeks again but she keeps her voice steady. “But it did happen. And I found out about it in this morning’s paper. At least you had the sense to keep the others out of the papers. Now I’m not only betrayed but I’m humiliated. It’s time for you to go. I packed a bag for you. It’s there by the door.”

“She didn’t mean anything to me.”  Midge hears his voice begin to crack. “I can’t believe I screwed things up so badly. I love you and I can’t bear the thought of losing you.”

She brushes away her tears, turns to glare at him and picks up the phone lying next to her. “If you are not out of this house in the next sixty seconds I am calling 9-1-1.”  She turns back to the window and hears his retreating footsteps, the click of the handle of his suitcase, the creak of the door to the garage, the vibration of the automatic garage door through the wall, the humming of the car engine and the vibration of the garage door closing. Then silence.

Her eyes focus again on the yard. She thinks about her heart and realizes that it’s not broken. It’s like the leaves – crinkled and disintegrated and shattered beyond recognition. She wonders how long it will be until spring comes.

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Thanks again to all who entered. Remember, the deadline for the Write On! Online – March Challenge: Green is March 31st. Also check Write On! Online on April 1st for information on The April Challenge!

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  1. ganymeder 8 years ago

    Great story!

  2. Olivia Tejeda 8 years ago

    P.J. Kaiser is one powerful writer. This honor is well earned!

  3. Dan Powell 8 years ago

    An emotional story. The closing metaphor provides a powerful ending full of sadness and hope. Congratulations on the win.

  4. Donna Carrick 8 years ago

    Outstanding story, PJ. Well done.
    Donna

  5. PJ Kaiser 8 years ago

    Ganymeder, Olivia & Dan – Thanks so much for stopping by and I’m so glad you enjoyed the story! 🙂

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  8. P.J. Kaiser 8 years ago

    …and Donna! Thanks so much for your comment 🙂

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